Wow, this reminds me of Stargate: SG1. lol. Great stuff!

Wow, really good! All you need to do is mix it and master it! When you do mixing, the volume levels need lowering a lot. Good thing to do for quality is to increase input volume but decrease output volume so it doesn't go over the red. Bad things happen when digital sound goes over the red... bad bad bad things...

It seems like it could be good, but the audio mix is just terrible. Sorry. The cymbals are WAY too loud. In fact, thats pretty much all I hear. Mix the song a little better, then reupload.

I think it sounds pretty darn good, despite the timing problems. I think what you should do is re-record it, and when you do, try putting in some harmonizing vocals or double track them. That would sound pretty cool I think. :D

Nice render. Looks real!